Directions
In this section, you will be asked to write a critique of the argument presented.
You are NOT being asked to present your own views on the subject.
For the
Analysis of an Argument section, you will need to analyze the reasoning
behind a given argument and write a critique of that argument. You are not being
asked to present your own views on the subject.
Consider the following when developing your essay:
- What questionable assumptions underlie the thinking behind the argument?
- What alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion?
- What sort of evidence could help strengthen or refute the argument?
What Is Measured
The Analysis of an Argument section tests your ability to formulate an appropriate
and constructive critique of a specific conclusion based on a specific line of thinking.
Question
The following appeared in the editorial section of a monthly business news magazine:
"Most companies would agree that as the risk of physical injury occurring on the
job increases, the wages paid to employees should also increase. Hence it makes
financial sense for employers to make the workplace safer: they could thus reduce
their payroll expenses and save money."
Discuss how well reasoned you find this argument. In your discussion be sure to
analyze the line of reasoning and the use of evidence in the argument. For example,
you may need to consider what questionable assumptions underlie the thinking and
what alternative explanations or counterexamples might weaken the conclusion. You
can also discuss what sort of evidence would strengthen or refute the argument,
what changes in the argument would make it more logically sound, and what, if anything,
would help you better evaluate its conclusion.
Answer
The following is an
actual AWA essay that received the highest rating:
This argument states that it makes financial sense for employers to make the workplace
safer because by making the workplace safer then lower wages could be paid to employees.
This conclusion is based on the premise that as the list of physical injury increases,
the wages paid to employees should also increase. However, there are several assumptions
that may not necessarily apply to this argument. For example, the costs associated
with making the workplace safe must outweigh the increased payroll expenses due
to hazardous conditions. Also, one must look at the plausability of improving the
work environment. And finally, because most companies agree that as the risk of
injury increases so will wages doesn't necessarily mean that the all companies which
have hazardous work environments agree.
The first issue to be addressed is whether increased labor costs justify large capital
expenditures to improve the work environment. Clearly one could argue that if making
the workplace safe would cost an exorbitant amount of money in comparison to leaving
the workplace as is and paying slightly increased wages than it would not make sense
to improve the work environment. For example, if making the workplace safe would
cost $100 million versus additional payroll expenses of only $5,000 per year, it
would make financial sense to simply pay the increased wages. No business or business
owner with any sense would pay all that extra money just to save a couple dollars
and improve employee health and relations. To consider this, a cost benefit analysis
must be made. I also feel that although a cost benefit analysis should be the determining
factor with regard to these decisions making financial sense, it may not be the
determining factor with regard to making social, moral and ethical sense.
This argument also relies on the idea that companies solely use financial sense
in analysing improving the work environment. This is not the case. Companies look
at other considerations such as the negative social ramifications of high on-job
injuries. For example, Toyota spends large amounts of money improving its environment
because while its goal is to be profitable, it also prides itself on high employee
morale and an almost perfectly safe work environment. However, Toyota finds that
it can do both, as by improving employee health and employee relations they are
guaranteed a more motivated staff, and hence a more efficient staff; this guarantees
more money for the business as well as more safety for the employees.
Finally one must understand that not all work environments can be made safer. For
example, in the case of coal mining, a company only has limited ways of making the
work environment safe. While companies may be able to ensure some safety precautions,
they may not be able to provide all the safety measures necessary. In other words,
a mining company has limited ability to control the air quality within a coal mine
and therefore it cannot control the risk of employees getting blacklung. In other
words, regardless of the intent of the company, some jobs are simply dangerous in
nature.
In conclusion, while at first it may seem to make financial sense to improve the
safety of the work environment sometimes it truly does not make financial sense.
Furthermore, financial sense may not be the only issue a company faces. Other types
of analyses must be made such as the social ramifications of an unsafe work environment
and the overall ability of a company to improve that environment (i.e., coal mine).
Before any decision is made, all this things must be considered, not simply the
reduction of payroll expenses.